F2F Class Notes 19th July (Jesse)

Yell / shout 
eg. they were yelling “f ____”

I am concerned = i am worried

I am concerned about sth = i am worried about it

I am concerned with sth = i am connected to it / about

This email is concerned with sth = is about

noun – which one? / how many? 
I broke my leg
I like the coffee  

a competitor (not clear about how many in total, but you mean 1)
the competitor (clear, and there’s only 1 in total)
one of the competitors (clear, 1 from many)

Two days ago, I read a news from Wechat that concern about
a famous football player, Demba Ba, was broken his a leg by Sun who is a
competitor in Demba Ba’s match.

It sounded a horrible thing what I had
never seen because it was harmful for the athlete and it was not moral to this
player. Even if you are not able to win the game, you should respect your
competitor during the game. At least, you should keep the athlete’s safety. If
not, you have some problems in your mind, I think. You need a doctor.

In that case, we should make some rules to
protect the plays’ safety. And we should punish the athlete of breaking rules
to prohibit their sports of representing club.

Two days ago, I read some / a piece of news from Wechat that concerns
a famous football player, Demba Ba, who’s leg was broken by Sun who is one of the competitors in Demba Ba’s match.

It sounds like a horrible thing that / which I had
never seen before. It was harmful for the athlete and it was immoral to this
player. Even if you are not able to win the game, you should respect your
competitor during the game. At least, you should keep the athlete’s safety. If
not, you have some problems in your mind, I think. You need a doctor.

In that case, we should make some rules to
protect the plays’ safety. And we should punish the athlete of breaking rules
to prohibit their sports of representing club.

Simple writing + upgrade

Two days ago, I read some news from Wechat that was about a football player named Ba, who broke his leg. Sun, who is a competitor in Demba Ba’s match, was the player who did this. I think this situation / accident / incident is an unbelievably terrible thing which I have never seen before. The reason I think it’s so terrible, is that it is harmful to the athlete and immoral to this player.

You should have respect for your competitors during the game, even if you cannot the game. Keeping the athletes safety is the least you should do. If you don’t do that, you should go to see the doctor because you have some mental problems.

In that case we should make some rules to protect the players safety, and we should punish the athlete to ban them from playing.