OpenF2F Class Notes 6th May (Celeste)

Next class: Please review the last edited writing entry and teach new, native ways.

selling women’s clothes

selling women’s fashion

sale <> discount

clothes <> close

cloth > cloths = materials, fabrics

these days <> recently/ lately/  these past few days / a few days ago

Original

Today I want to discuss my life in Shanghai .I came to Shanghai in 2015 for studying in Shanghai maritime university for graduate degree . I postgraduated and entered in a foreign company last year. From then on，I started my career. I waked up at 8 o’clock in the morning and arrived to my company at about 9:30 am at workdays. Then I started my busy working time until 6pm，but sometimes I must work extra hours with my colleagues. It seems boring but it’s also meaningful .

At weekends ，I usually go outside to breathe fresh air and chat with my friends. It enriches my life and I get enough power from it.

Edited

Today I want to discuss my life in Shanghai. I came to Shanghai in 2015 to study at Shanghai maritime university for my graduate degree. I gradutated / After graduation I and joined a foreign company last year. From then on，I started my career. I wake up at 8 o’clock in the morning and arrive at my company at about 9:30am. Then I usually work until 6pm，but sometimes I must work overtime with my colleagues. It seems boring but it’s also meaningful .

At weekends ，I usually go outside to breathe fresh air and chat with my friends. It enriches my life and I get enough power from it.

TBC