Open + Review 16th October (Tony)

Atmosphere – the feeling of everything around you. eg: “Most people go to coffee shops for the atmosphere, not just for the coffee.”

Original –

Every time, when I taked the subway.I found that more than 90%people are always on themselves phones .This phenomenon is very
commom. I can’t say it’s not good, because
moblie phone  has been the most important things in our lives as it can brighten up and color to our existence. However, I hope we can read a book to enjoy the leisure time in subway to instead of  playing the phone. Of coures,it  is no easy task to say which we change the way in our life style.

Correction –

Every time I took the subway, I found that more than 90% of people are always on their phones. This phenomenon is very common. I can’t say it’s not good, because mobile phones  have been the most important things in our lives as they can brighten up and bring color to our existence. However, I hope we can read a book to enjoy leisure time in the subway instead of  playing on our phones. Of course, it  is no easy task that we change our lifestyle immediately.