Open Review 13th October (Tony)

Original

John wanted to go on a vacation to US, when he applied a visa in American Embassy, he met with an unfair treatment. He organized some people who had the same experiences and planned to give a protest to American Embassy. First, he sent an email to the head of the American Embassy, and requested the officer to give them an apology. Second days later, they hadn’t received any responds. So they decided to organize a parade to express their anger

Correction

John wanted to go on a vacation to the U.S. When he applied for a visa at the American Embassy he was met with some unfair treatment. First, he sent an email to the head of the American Embassy, and requested the officer give them an apology. Several days later, they hadn’t received any response. Then he organized some people who had the same experiences and planned to hold a protest at the American Embassy. So they decided to organize a march to express their anger, and they gathered in front of the American Embassy.