Open F2F Class Notes 25nd July (Lina) Writing

Original:

I went to Korea a few months ago and it was a pretty interesting trip.The overall impression of Korea was that almost everyone in Korea focused on their dressing and they all look delicate.Both women and men made up in this country especially young people.As we all know,Korean cosmetic industry is very famous across the globe and lots of native brands dominate the international market.There were so many coffee shops there as well.

Correction:

I went to Korea a few months ago and it was a pretty interesting trip. My overall impression of Korea was that almost everyone seemed to be really focused on how they dress and that they all look delicate. Both women and men wear make up in this country, especially young people. As we all know the Korean cosmetic industry is very famous across the globe and many of their native brands dominate the international market. I also noticed that there are many coffee shops there as well.

Example by Lina:

I went to Korea a few months ago and it turned out to be a pretty interesting trip. My overall impression of Korea is that most people put a lot of emphasis on their appearance, everywhere you go people are all made up and they all look great. I noticed that both women and men wear make- up, this was especially noticeable amongst the younger population, and is something that I haven’t really witnessed anywhere else.  We all know the Korean cosmetic industry is very famous across the globe and many of their native brands dominate the international market. I can’t help but wonder if it’s the strong beauty industry that has influenced the culture of Korea or if it’s the culture that has made the industry great.

On a different note, I also noticed that there are a lot of coffee shops everywhere, as appose to china, which suits me well because coffee is my drug of choice.  Overall I had a great time in Korea and I would recommend anyone to go there.