Online Class Notes (Phoebe)

Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (250 words, from IELTS writing)

Original:

I don’t think that’s a good example to young people, because as we know that young people can easy to be affected, so if we don’t get them a good or correct example, then they may not know what is the correct way. And all that they know will be I want to be rich, I want to be pretty, I don’t want a hard work, something like that. So I think a good example for young people will be their work.

If the celerity is a actor, they should have famous films. If the celebrity is a singer, they should have famous songs.

With corrections:

I don’t think that’s a good example for celebrities to be admired for their glamour and wealth to by young people, because as we know that young people can easy to be affected it is very easy for young people to get affected, so if we don’t get them/set up a good or correct example for them, then they may not know what is the correct way. And all that they know will be how to get rich, how to become pretty, or how to get an easy job etc. I want to be rich, I want to be pretty, I don’t want a hard work, something like that. So I think a good example for young people will be their work. should appreciate celebrities by their work.

If the celerity is a actor/actress, they should have famous films. If the celebrity is a singer, they should have famous songs.

Vocabulary

appreciate v. 欣赏

I really appreciated my colleague’s helping me at work/that my colleague helped me at work.

vault n. 保险库

compulsory adj. 必须的

It is compulsory to wear the suit to go to the party.

unveil v. 揭露，宣布

bloc: a group of countries

EU: European Union

utility bills 公共设施账单（电费、水费账单……）

retina n. 视网膜 retina scanning 

rollout n. 首次展示

They introduced the rollout of the new product in the company.

pregnant adj.

ultimate 最终的

My ultimate dream is to have a big house.

Grammar

young people can easy to be affected it is very easy for young people to get affected/young people can easily get affected 

if….       如果……就

If we don’t set up a good or correct example for them, then they may not know what is the correct way.

如果我们不给他们树立好的榜样，他们就不知道什么是对的。

although  尽管……但是

although I tried hard, but I failed it.

fall down from the desk fall off the desk

except vs besides

Besides being happy, I was also annoyed.

Everyone went to the park, except Tom. (Tom didn’t go)

Besides Tom, I also went to the park. (Tom and I both went)

Pronunciation

wallet 

securely

unveil

utility

flexibility

access

ultimately 最终地