Online Class Notes (Joe)

[Original sentence: “She looks solid and sporty.”] The word “solid” is not appropriate to describe a person’s appearance. A more suitable word could be “sturdy” or “athletic.”

[Original sentence: “We often receive the comments from her teachers that she is the most active student in class，have many friends and the first one raising the hand after the teacher’s question.”] There is a subject-verb agreement error in this sentence. “Have” should be “has” to agree with the singular subject “student.” The corrected sentence is “We often receive comments from her teachers that she is the most active student in class, has many friends, and is the first one raising her hand after the teacher’s question.”

[Original sentence: “On one hand, she always can ask many questions one by one, why? Why? Why?”] The word “can” is unnecessary in this sentence. The correct sentence is “On one hand, she always asks many questions one by one, why? Why? Why?”

[Original sentence: “especially book about nature, space, and fiction stories.”] The word “book” should be plural in this sentence to agree with the plural noun “stories.” The correct sentence is “especially books about nature, space, and works of fiction.”

[Original sentence: “She’s got curly hair and a little dark-skinned.”] The term “dark-skinned” is not appropriate to describe a person’s complexion. A more suitable term could be “dark-complexioned” or “dark-toned.”

[Original sentence: “She has good perception about art and music.”] The word “perception” is not appropriate to describe a person’s appreciation of art and music. A more suitable word would be “appreciation” or “understanding.” The corrected sentence is “She has a good appreciation for art and music.”

[She is tall and slim, got dark-skinned.] The correct phrasing would be “She is tall and slim, with dark skin.” The phrase “got dark-skinned” is not grammatically correct.

[We usually caller her Big Beauty Crystal.] The correct phrasing would be “We usually call her Big Beauty Crystal.” The verb “caller” should be “call.”

[However, her character maybe not that beautiful.] The correct phrasing would be “However, her character may not be that beautiful.” The word “maybe” should be “may” and “that” should be added after “be.”

[She is often muzzy about her personal life, no plan, or no deadline.] The phrase “muzzy about” is not commonly used. A better alternative would be “unclear about.” Also, the sentence would be clearer if broken up into three separate sentences. For example, “She is disoriented int her personal life. She has no plan, and no deadline.”

[Onetime, we would have a business meeting in Singapore.] The correct phrasing would be “One time, we had a business meeting in Singapore.” “Onetime” is not a word, and “would have” should be changed to “had.”

[She was determined that her Visa Permission was in valid.] The correct phrasing would be “She determined that her Visa Permission was valid.” The phrase “in valid” is not grammatically correct.

[But, on the day before departure, she found her Visa had been out of valid 10 months ago.] The correct phrasing would be “But on the day before departure, she discovered that her visa had been invalid for 10 months.” The phrase “out of valid” is not commonly used, and “discovered” is a better verb choice than “found.”

[On the other side, she is unsociable but she is gifted to do PPT.] The phrase “on the other side” does not make sense in this context. A better phrase would be “On the other hand.” Also, “to do PPT” is not a common phrase. Instead, it would be more appropriate to say “to create PowerPoint presentations.”

[Although, she usually finished the slides at the last minutes before the meeting, but we all have full confidence in her.] The phrase “at the last minutes” should be “at the last minute.” Also, “although” and “but” should not be used together in this sentence. A better phrasing would be “Despite finishing the slides at the last minute before the meeting, we all have full confidence in her.”