Online Class Notes (Jesse)

Vocabulary

simile – like
metaphor – is

what a rip off – too expensive / like a scam

background: sound, smells, weather, time of day, what has happened already, what we can see (colors, materials)

Don’t say: MB sees customers who are sipping coffee
Say: There were many customers filling the cafe, all sipping away on their aromatic coffees
Or say: The cafe was full of customers, all happily sipping away on their yummy coffees

Don’t say: MB was shocked
Say: There was an overpowering feeling of shock that filled MB as he tried to consider ….
Or say: An intense feeling of shock came over MB …

In a busy but quiet cafe, there are students and adults sitting away coffees and there was a smash as a customer bumped into another customer, dropping their cup on the ground. The smell of coffee was wafting through the cafe, the chitter chatter of the customers could be heard around the room. MB had chosen to order a small cup of coffee and was watching the barista, and trying to figure out what’s going on. Then when the barista was finished MB was shocked to find a tiny cup of coffee in front of him, and MB asked the barista if that was it but the barista remembered that he forgot some foam. So he poured some foam on MB’s coffee and then he tapped on the cash registered and it displayed 5 pounds. MB didn’t see how much it displayed but he thought that this was a big scam because the coffee was so small, but he only got a 5 pound note in front of him so he got the 5 pound note out and held his hand out so that he could get his change but the barista was very confused because there was only 5 pounds in total so he told MB that there was no change so MB walked off saying what a rip off. As MB walked away, another customer pushed past him and MB was really annoyed by this bad customer and told him to watch out. Then he heard the sound of the coffee machine and he wondered how big the other guy’s coffee is and when he walked away the other guy’s coffee was a million times bigger than his. And as MB walked away to find the seat the man pushed his chair back deliberately so he can hit MB but MB was so jealous of his coffee that he told him to shutup. MB walked to a big table and drank his coffee with one sip but he thought it was very yucky and he was about to scream and go crazy but then he saw a woman and she was also drinking coffee but she was feeling relaxed and she liked the coffee very much so she was sipping tiny drops so that he coffee would last longer.

In a busy but quiet cafe, there are customers sipping away coffees and there was a smash as a customer bumped into another customer, dropping their cup on the ground. The smell of coffee was wafting through the cafe, and the chitter chatter of the customers could be heard around the room. MB had chosen to order a small cup of coffee and was watching the barista curiously, with anticipation, and trying to figure out what’s going on. Then when the barista was finished MB was shocked to find a tiny cup of coffee in front of him, and MB asked the barista if that was it but the barista remembered that he forgot some foam. So he poured some foam on MB’s coffee and then he tapped on the cash register and it displayed 5 pounds. MB didn’t see how much it displayed but he thought that this was a big scam because the coffee was so small, but he only got a 5 pound note in front of him so he got the 5 pound note out and held his hand out so that he could get his change but the barista was very confused because there was only 5 pounds in total so he told MB that there was no change. There was an overpowering feeling of shock that filled MB’s mind when he realised he wasn’t getting any change. MB walked off saying what a rip off. With MB already being quite angry after feeling like he had just been scammed, a customer bumped into him, making MB even more angry. As MB walked away, another customer pushed past him and MB was really annoyed by this bad customer and told him to watch out. Then he heard the sound of the coffee machine and he wondered how big the other guy’s coffee is and when he walked away the other guy’s coffee was a million times bigger than his. And as MB walked away to find the seat the man pushed his chair back deliberately so he can hit MB but MB was so jealous of his coffee that he told him to shutup. MB walked to a big table and drank his coffee with one sip but he thought it was very yucky and he was about to scream and go crazy but then he saw a woman and she was also drinking coffee but she was feeling relaxed and she liked the coffee very much so she was sipping tiny drops so that he coffee would last longer.