Online Class Notes (Jesse)

Great sentences in writing but remember to check all of your grammar!! You already knew most of the mistakes we corrected today so check them next time before sending your homework:

he / she / it / name does
verb tense – you don’t need to use past or future tense with time like “always, sometimes, often, every day”
the = you know and I know, so don’t use it unless we both know or can 100% guess.

There are 6 grownups and little Charlie who live a small wooden house. That house is not enough big , because there are 2 rooms and one bed in total and when winter comes, they would feel horrible. Charlie ‘s father works in the toothpaste factory as a worker and he works hard but his salary was so low. Charlie’s family rely on father to maintain their living so that they always go about from morning till night with a horrible empty feeling in their tummies.Charlie keen to eat chocolate like the other children but he don’t have enough money to buy it so that every times he pass the chocolate shop , and then he always stops at the moment in the front of the shop.When Charlie’s birthday coming, his family members decided to give a little money to Charlie.Finally, Charlie buys a bar of chocolate from shop and take a nibble everyday. The end of the story talk about there is the largest and more famous factory locates in that place which Charlie lives in, and it scent with heavy smell of chocolate everyday when people go by it

There are 6 grownups and little Charlie who live in a small wooden house. That house is not big enough, because there are 2 rooms and one bed in total and when winter comes, they would feel horrible. Charlie ‘s father works in a toothpaste factory as a worker and he works hard but his salary is so low. Charlie’s family rely / depend on father to maintain their living so that they always go about from morning till night with a horrible empty feeling in their tummies. Charlie is keen to eat chocolate like the other children but he doesn’t have enough money to buy it so that every time he passes the chocolate shop , and then he always stops for a moment in the front of the shop. When Charlie’s birthday coming, his family members decided to give a little money to Charlie. Finally, Charlie buys a bar of chocolate from the shop and takes a nibble everyday. At the end of the story it talks about the fact that there is a factory which is the largest and most famous factory, (which is) located where Charlie lives, and there is a strong smell / scent of chocolate everyday when people go by it.

Grammar

the wonka – Willie Wonka

where = and at that place / at the place that
eg. there is a swimming pool where many people swims in there

I have a headache due to the fact that I drank too much beer.

The story talks about the fact that there is a factory near Charlie’s house.

I have class for an hour
I stop for a moment

I practice English so that I can improve quickly = so – reason (because I want to)
I was late so Jesse was angry = so – result

I don’t have enough money
It is not good enough

the food is not good enough
it is not good enough food