F2F Class Notes (Ben) [W]

Original

Last year i went to Thailand with my friends.There were lots of delicious fruit there,such as mango ,durian,super sweet!.Because the fruit in Thailand is cheap,we bough lots of mango when we came back the hotel.
In addition,there were beautiful sea everywhere.The happiest was that we took a big boat trip to the Similan Islands,we enjoyed them very much.My girl friends wore bikini in the beach,they looked so sexy.We swim at the sea,it was so interesting.We took photos each other and it was an unforgettable experience.
Traveling bring me a lot of pleasure and I could make many new friends in the travel. I must study English well,because I want to go to more counties.

Edited version

Last year, I went to Thailand with my friends. There were lots of delicious fruits there, such as mangoes and durians. They were super sweet! Because the fruits in Thailand are cheap, we bought lots of mangoes when we came back to the hotel.
In addition, there was beautiful sea everywhere. The happiest thing was that we took a big boat trip to the Similan Islands. We enjoyed them very much. My girlfriends played in bikinis at the beach and (they) looked so sexy. We swam in the sea. It was so interesting. We took photos of each other and it was an unforgettable experience.

Traveling brings me a lot of pleasure and I can make many new friends in the travel. I must study English well, because I want to go to more countries.

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• I = 总是是大写
• 句号，逗号，问号，感叹号以后有空格
• 可数名词 : a, the, my, 复数

lots of fruit –> lots of fruits

• 每个句子都有一个主语和一个动词
• go, come to
• 换时态应该有具体清楚的原因，比如说: after, before, now, then

swim / swam / (have) swum

swim = 现在时

swam = 时间明确= this morning, yesterday, 3 days ago, last year, when I was a child, when I lived in Beijing, before coming here 游泳了

have swum = 时间不明确= already, never, until now, so far 游泳过

I have swum in the ocean before.

I have lived in Shanghai for 3 years (until now).