F2F Class Notes 22nd August (Celeste)***

1st Edited:
Two years ago I graduated from Shanghai Normal University with my Bachelors Degree in Economics. During my four years in university I did many different courses in Economics which are very helpful to my job, such as Marketing, Accounting and Management.
I hope to achieve good sales results for in the cosmetics industry, because I am really interested in cosmetics.

2nd Edit:

Two years ago I graduated from Shanghai Normal University with my Bachelors Degree in Economics. During my four years in university I did/studied many different courses in Economics which are very helpful for my career, such as Marketing, Accounting and Management.
I hope to achieve good sales results for the cosmetics industry, because I am really interested in cosmetics.

***Try to develop this further and to talk more about your personal dreams and about how they can fit into what the company has to offer and what they can take from you

Original

I want to be an independent woman and hope to achieve success in my future career. So, I do every job seriously and I try my best to learn more skills from every different position.  I think my past experiences can help you to increase your sales perfomance, I am good at communicate with different departments and I can try my best to support to have more support from our vendor.

Edited

I want to be an independent woman and hope to achieve success in the future. An independent woman to me is a woman who has a satisfying career and salary.

So, I do every job seriously and I try my best to learn more skills from every different position and manager.

So, I think my past experiences can help you/your company to increase your sales performance, I am superb at communicating with different departments and I can try my best to get more support from our vendors.

good > great > beneficial, fabulous, amazing, exceptional, excellent, marvelous, wonderful, magnificent, superb, satisfactory, pro (professional), expert

TBC

1st Edit:

Coty is the biggest company in the fragrance market and has a complete system of technological process.Because of all that, I think Coty can be a great place to learn more skills and improve myself. In my previous working experience, I did some different kinds of incentive and promotion plans which helped our company increase the sales of fragrances in 10% in one year.

***Try to think of other reasons why the company is a good choice for you and why you’re a good choice for them. They already know how big they are, so you need to show them that you “did your homework” and that you understand their company, their processes and how your skills can benefit them in the form of results.***

Coty – passion, creative freedom, entrepreneurial spirit 

***find a way to incorporate these words into your answer.

entrepreneur ( on tra pruh  newer ) n. – a person who organizes and manages a company

entrepreneurial  ( on tra pruh ner ee ull ) adj.

eg. She is an entrepreneur, she started her own cosmetic company. She is entrepreneurial.