F2F Class Notes 18th January (Celeste) [W/S]***

Continue writing the short story below about what you will do with your cousin while she is here in Shanghai for 3 weeks.

Original

Last Saturday, I went to my best friend’s home in the morning. She suggested we can made a chocolate cookie. We spent many times on it because sometimes we put too little chocolate or too much milk in the bowl. We always tried again and we found the material for thirty minutes. when we got all the materials “Eureka!” she said excited. Then we played a interesting game about the funny goat together, we can made the goat do any things. We ceaselessly spin the goat and impacted the fellows then laughed loudly. I had a nice weekend with my friend and I will cherish the times about I stay with her. I really don’t want to leave with her.

Fiona’s Edit

Last Saturday, I went to my best friend’s house in the morning. She suggested we could make chocolate cookies. We spent many times to made cookies because sometimes we put too little chocolate or too much milk in the bowl. We found the material for thirty minutes. when we got all the materials “Eureka!” she said excited. And we always tried again to made cookies.Then we played an interesting game about the funny goat together, we could make the goat do any things. We ceaselessly spined the goat and impacted the fellows then laughed loudly. I had a nice weekend with my friend and I will cherish the times about I stay with her. I really don’t want to leave her

Celeste’s Edit

Last Saturday, I went to my best friend’s house in the morning. She suggested we could make chocolate cookies. We spent many hours to make cookies because sometimes we put too little chocolate or too much milk in the bowl. We found the ingredients for thirty minutes. When we got all the ingredients “Eureka!” she said excitedly.  After that, we continued to try again to make cookies.Then we played an interesting game about a funny goat, we could make the goat do anything. We ceaselessly spinned the goat and made him hit/run into many men, so we laughed loudly. I had a nice weekend with my friend and I will cherish the times I stayed/spent with her. I really don’t want to leave her.

Vocabulary

materials – things to make things usually cannot eat them

ingredients – things to cook food

her mother and father got divorced/ they are divorced

eg. Her parents got divorced when she was a child. / When she was a child, her parents got divorced.

Original

She will be here for 3 weeks. She will celebrate NY’s with us. She will be here at 3 o’clock.  First, I will give her 2 NY’s gifts. Her favorite girl band CD’s. Last week I drawed  a drawing for her of I and her childhood something….

TBC