Email Service Notes (Tony)

Your Original Email

• What is the most shocking advertisement you have seen?
The beauty & fashion industry shock and offend me every single day with their advertisements. You just have to look closely to see what they are telling women about who they are and who they should be.

• What makes an ad memorable?
I think it should attract people’s attention quickly and be simple to demonstrate the product’s advantages and features.

• Do you buy products because of advertising?
I think I should buy what I need and when I need, however, when I choose something from various products with similar function and price, I tend to pay more attention to those which are advertised the most. So sometimes advertising will affect people decision.

Your Edited Email

• What is the most shocking advertisement you have seen?
The beauty & fashion industry shocks and offends me every single day with their advertisements. You just have to look closely to see what they are telling women about who they are and who they should be.

• What makes an ad memorable?
I think it should be catchy and simple to demonstrate the product’s advantages and features.

• Do you buy products because of advertising?
I think I should buy what I need, when I need it. However, when I choose something from various products with similar functions and prices, I tend to pay more attention to those which are advertised the most. So sometimes advertising will affect people‘s decision.

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