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The reason that young people prefer to go on long trips nowadays can be divided as two main parts.
Firstly, young people suffer from too much stress in study or work, even worse, some of those stress comes from their own family. Moreover, young people don’t usually keep their money in banks, so having a long trip can be a great choice to get rid of schools, companies and their family for at least a couple of weeks (if they travel alone or with friends).
The other part is that you can totally immerse yourself in that city when you have a long trip. Majority of elder people like to take one week trips through travel agency. The advantages of that kind of trip are that you can spend less money and save lots of time to make itinerary. But it also can be super boring, you just show up at every famous constructions and take a bunch of photos which you can easily download online, then go back to your bus and rush for another place. On the contrary, having a long trip can be so much more fun. You can eat whatever you want, go wherever you’d like to go. Spending more time with local people and exchanging your different cultures also can be good ideas.
Though it may be a little dangerous to put yourself in a whole new environment for such a long time, sometimes unknown is the most attractive thing in this world.

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The reason that young people prefer to go on long trips nowadays can be divided into two main parts.
Firstly, young people suffer from too much stress in study or work, even worse, some of those stresses comes from their own family. Moreover, young people don’t usually keep their money in banks, so taking a long trip can be a great choice to get away from schools, companies and their family for at least a couple of weeks (if they travel alone or with friends).
The other part is that you can totally immerse yourself in that city when you have a long trip. The majority of elderly people like to take one week trips through a travel agency. The advantages of that kind of trip are that you can spend less money and save lots of time to make an itinerary. But it also can be super boring, you just show up at every famous site and take a bunch of photos which you can easily download online, then go back to your bus and rush to another place. On the contrary, having a long trip can be so much more fun. You can eat whatever you want, go wherever you’d like to go. Spending more time with local people and exchanging your different cultures also can be good.
Though it may be a little dangerous to put yourself in a whole new environment for such a long time, sometimes the unknown is the most attractive thing in this world.