Email Service Notes (Tony)

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Part A
Book recommending
Dear reading club member,

How about the books I recommended you last time? I am recommending you a new book here. I am deeply attracted by it, however I read it more than 2 times.

The book name is the influence, which is composed of lots of small stories, and the author summarize key points from them. As usual. I share 3 reasons why I love it. First of all, it is a useful tool-book, it can teach you that how to influent other people using small actions. The second, there are plenty of scenes you can use them. The last but not at least, these skills that you can use in your whole life all the time.

Sincerely, I hope you will love it too.
Thank you
Liming

Part B
The times of cell phone

Out of all of the components depicted in the drawing, the most eye-catching part is that 4 people have lunch together but they all play their cell phone and they do not gossip with each other. Conceivably, what the picture intends to imply is that according to the cell phone and APPs technology’s development, more and more younger people pay more attention to online social society instead of reality society.

In fact, this kind of phenomenon is not uncommon in our society nowadays and considering its significance, it is necessary to point out the causes behind it. Firstly, younger people can build a prefect online image, no matter what disadvantages they have. Next, reading the news or friends moment are the most ways of relaxing themselves.

From my personal perspective, every coin has two sides, which is the same as the times of cell phones. I think cell phones have good and bad aspects. On the good side, it really helps people to contact with other people whatever how far. On the bad side, it will establish an invisible barrier with closest person. As a conclusion, we should realize its two sides and using it in a properly manner.

Your Corrected Email:

Part A
Book recommendations
Dear reading club member,

How about the books I recommended you last time? I am recommending you a new book here. I am deeply drawn to it, I’ve already read it more than 2 times.

The book‘s name is “The influence”, which is composed of lots of small stories, and the author summarizes key points from them. I will share 3 reasons why I love it. First of all, it is a useful tool-book, it can teach you how to influence other people using small actions. The second, there are plenty of situations you can use. The last but not at least, these skills that you can use in your whole life all the time.

Sincerely, I hope you will love it too.
Thank you
Liming

Part B
The times of cell phone

Out of all of the components depicted in the drawing, the most eye-catching part is that 4 people have lunch together but they all play on their cell phones and they do not talk to each other. Conceivably, what the picture intends to imply is that according to the cell phone and APPs technology’s development, more and more younger people pay more attention to online social society instead of real society.

In fact, this kind of phenomenon is not uncommon in our society nowadays and considering it’s significance, it is necessary to point out the causes behind it. Firstly, younger people can build a perfect online image, no matter what disadvantages they have. Next, reading the news or friends moments are the most common ways they relax.

From my personal perspective, every coin has two sides, which is the same as the times of cell phones. I think cell phones have good and bad aspects. On the good side, it really helps people contact other people however far away. On the bad side, it will establish an invisible barrier with the closest person. As a conclusion, we should realize its two sides and use them in a proper manner.