Email Service Notes (Jesse)

Your Original Email

Hi Teacher,

Here are the homework from last class, I need to fix the sentences that I have said in last class by myself, can you please review and correct?

Original : They request us to give them feedback about this.
Correction 1: They requested us to give them feedback about this.
Correction 2: They requested us to give them feedback on this.

Original: They have some record of we have been using unlicensed software for several months.
Correction 1: They have some records showing that we’ve been using unlicensed software for months.
Correction 2: They said they had evidence that we’ve been using unauthorized software for months.

Original：I asked them back, what do you want to do with us?
Correction 1：I asked them what do you want to do to us?
Correction 2: I asked them what do you want?

Original: If we will use AUTOCAD for our business, we need to buy a licensed software from them as soon as possible.
Correction：If our business needs to use AUTOCAD, then we need to buy licensed software from them as soon as possible.

Original: Otherwise they will do the lawsuit.
Correction: Otherwise they will sue us for infringement

Thank you and have a nice day
Nicole

Your Edited Email

Hi Teacher,

Here is the homework from last class. I need to fix the sentences that I said in my last class by myself, can you please review and correct them / it?

Original : They request us to give them feedback about this.
Correction 1: They requested us to give them feedback about this.
Correction 2: They requested us to give them feedback on this.
Correction 3: They requested that we give them feedback on this

Original: They have some record of we have been using unlicensed software for several months.
Correction 1: They have some records showing that we’ve been using unlicensed software for months.
Correction 2: They said they had evidence that we’ve been using unauthorized software for months.

Original：I asked them back, what do you want to do with us?
Correction 1：I asked them what do you want to do to us?
Correction 2: I asked them what do you want?
Hmm the meanings of these 3 are different – we can discuss next class.

Original: If we will use AUTOCAD for our business, we need to buy a licensed software from them as soon as possible.
Correction：If our business needs to use AUTOCAD, then we need to buy (some) licensed software from them as soon as possible.

Original: Otherwise they will do the lawsuit.
Correction: Otherwise they will sue us for infringement / Otherwise they will file a lawsuit against us

Thank you and have a nice day
Nicole