Email Service Notes (Cricket)

Your Original Email

My apartment situates closely to Shanghai stadium and my room is not very big. Usually, foldaway furniture is the answer where space is at a premium. Despite the fact that I only have so much room for myself, I am prepared to pay a premium for its location where traffic is pretty convenient. What’s more, part of my salary is reserved to pay my insurance premiums except my rent to landlord very month.
During the football games held in Shanghai stadium, accommodation will be at a premium out there. Regardless of premium prices of hotels, big fans of football who come from different cities come here chasing for the premium quality football games.

Your Edited Email

My apartment is situated close to Shanghai stadium. My room is not very big. Usually, foldaway furniture is the answer when space is limited. Despite the fact that I only have so much room for myself, I am willing to pay a premium price for its location where traffic is pretty convenient. What’s more, part of my salary is reserved to pay my insurance premiums. ** I would take out the last sentence. It doesn’t make sense in the context.

During the football games held at Shanghai stadium, accommodation will be really high around the area. Regardless of premium prices of hotels, big football fans come here from different cities* chasing * the premium quality football games.