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Your Original Email

I attend a workshop of leading business today. It is designed for our client for their mid-level leaders to explore their insight of business. The workshop is combined of business strategy, finance and leadership. I am interested in the part of finance. With the explanation from our consultant, I understand the relevance between the revenue and net profit, and we cannot judge a company with its stock price. Another interesting thing is there are total 10 participants attend this workshop, but only one male participant. People would think this workshop is for Human Resource or other similar courses, if they don’t know the contents at the beginning time. We will arrange more simulation based discussion in the workshop tomorrow, I am looking forward to it.

Your Edited Email

I attended a workshop of leading business today.-I’m not sure if this is the name of the organization or program…but if it is not I would say it a couple ways depending on the context of the workshop…

I attended a workshop on business leaders of today. (for learning about famous business leaders)

I attended a workshop for business leaders of today. (for learning how to be a business leader) This seems like the most relevant one…

I attended a workshop on the leading business’s of today. (for learning about leading business’s)

All of these above could be correct^^^

It‘s a workshop designed for our clients’ mid-level boss’s to explore insights into business. -Native speakers usually refer to their upper management personal as their boss-. The workshop is a combination of business strategy, finance, and leadership. I am interested in the finance part/aspect. With the explanation from our consultant, I understood the relevance between the revenue and net profit, and how/why we cannot judge a company based on its stock price. Another interesting fact about the workshop is that there were a total  of 10 participants all of whom were female except for one. People might think this workshop is for Human Resources or other similar courses/departments, if they didn’t know the contents  beforehand. We will arrange more simulation based discussions in the workshop tomorrow, I am looking forward to it.