Email Service Notes 6th December (Celeste)

Writing exercise

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How people spent their holidays
What will you do on holiday? Different people have their own ways to spend holiday.
Twenty years ago, nearly 60 percent of people stayed at home on holiday instead of travelling. After 10 years, the percent reduced to 50 percent. Now only 25 percent of people stay at home on holiday.
What causes the result? The reason is simple. With the rapid development of transport and economy, more and more ppeople want to know the outside world and choose to travel to different places.
I think it’s very good for us to travel around the world. We can see other countries’ beautiful sceneries, experience different life style, taste mant specialities, know other countries’ cultures and widen our knowledge.
So mqny people are in high pressure. They should find a way to relieve stress. Traveling is a good way, which can let them forget the stress temporarily.

 

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How people spend their holidays
What will you do for the holidays? Different people have their own ways to spend the holidays.
Twenty years ago, nearly 60 percent of people stayed at home during the holidays instead of travelling. After 10 years, the percentage reduced to 50 percent. Now only 25 percent of people stay at home during this time.
What caused this result? The reason is simple. With the rapid development of transportation and the economy, more and more people want to know the outside world and choose to travel to different places.
I think it’s very good for us to travel around the world. We can see other countries’ beautiful places, experience different lifestyles, taste many specialties, know other countries’ cultures and widen our knowledge.
So many people are under high pressure. They should find a way to relieve their stress. Traveling is a good way, which can make people forget their stress temporarily.