Email Service Notes 4th March (Jesse)

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I talked to my friend on the phone  and she told me that she has rasied a cute pet.Guess what? It is a small squirrel ! She said happily that she often buy some nutritious nuts! I know she worked overtime until 11:00  last week , and she asked me to play on the water park!Futher more ,we made a plan to take art photos.My birthday is coming ,so I would like to leave some beautiful photos about myself .I want to dress on some special clothes,and be made up by makeup artist.If I  could ,I would like to stay 22 all the time!!

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I talked to my friend on the phone  and she told me that she has a cute pet. Guess what? It is a small squirrel ! She said happily that she often buys some nutritious nuts! I know she worked overtime until 11PM  last week , and she asked me to go with her to the water park! Futhermore ,we made a plan to take artistic photos together. It’s my birthday soon ,so I would like to take some beautiful photos of myself .I want to dress up in some special clothes,and be made up by a makeup artist.If I  could ,I would like to stay 22 forever