Email Service Notes 29th October (Jesse)

Your Original Email

Today is weekend,but I have to work.tommorow is the day of Shanghai marathon. I need to arrange my work members to join in work of marathon.today the weather is very cold.it makes me feel that the winner is coming, but I don’t like winner,because winner is so cold. I need cost more time to get up and take a shower is very terrible in winner.now I’m annoying because of the weather!

Your Edited Email

Today is the weekend, but I have to work. Tommorow is the day of the Shanghai marathon so I need to arrange my work team-members to join the marathon. Today the weather is very cold and it feels like winner is coming, but I don’t like winner, because it’s so cold. It takes me longer to get up and taking a shower is terrible in winter. Now I’m annoyed because of the weather!