Email Service Notes 17th January (Celeste)

Writing exercise

Diary 2017-01-16 Monday Cloudy

Yesterday was my father’s birthday.
I gave him a set of books as a birthday gift.
It’s about a grave robbery story.
In the past, the rich people or Kings of China would put their treasure into their graves when they die.
The grave robbers would find their graves and steal their treasure.
Grave robbers would take four candles in the four corners of the grave before they began their work.
If the candle was blown out during their work, they must stop to steal and leave the grave as soon as possible.
Because this means the owner of the grave is angry.
It’s a very interesting book.
I hope my father will like it.

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Diary 2017-01-16 Cloudy Monday

Yesterday was my father’s birthday.
I gave him a set of books as a birthday gift.
They are about a grave robbery.
In the past, the rich people/royalty or Kings/emperors of China would be buried in their graves with their treasure.
Grave robbers would find these graves and steal the treasure.
Grave robbers would place/put four lit candles in the four corners of the grave before they began their work/crime.
If the candles were/If a candle was blown out during the robbery, they would stop and leave the grave as soon as possible because this meant the owner of the grave was angry.
It’s a very interesting book set.
I hope my father will like it.