Email Service Notes 12th October (Jesse)

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I travelled a lot when I studied in Germany. My favorite travel destination is Santorini, an island of Greece. Actually I went there alone because my bf had some work to do so he couldn’t make it. I flew there on a sunny Friday then spent three days there. I went sailing on the second day of my trip, which I really enjoyed. When the yacht sailed on the sea, all the worries just went away. I also made a wise decision to choose a tourist guide, who showed me around and told me many interesting things about this island. For example, the name of the island – Santorini, came from a church of the island, which collapsed in a heap of ruin in wartime. We also visited a museum, which showed the life of the local people in the ancient time. It was nice to see the nice view there and know more about the history and culture things about the island at the same time. I would say it was a nice trip.

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I travelled a lot while I was studying in Germany, and my favorite travel destination was Santorini, an island of Greece. Actually I went there alone because my bf had some work to do so he couldn’t make it. I flew there on a sunny Friday and spent three days there. I went sailing on the second day of my trip, which I really enjoyed. When the yacht was sailing on the sea, all my worries just went / melted away. I also made a wise decision to choose a tourist guide, who showed me around and told me many interesting things about the island. For example, the name of the island – Santorini, came from a church of the island, which collapsed in a heap of ruins during wartime. We also visited a museum, which showed the life of the local people in ancient times. It was nice to see the nice view there and know more about the history and culture of the island at the same time. I would say it was a nice trip and I’d love to go back there again one day