Email Service Notes 12th July (Harmony)

Lan Email Service Original:

Hereby is a advertising for our upcoming conference, please kindly check it for me, thank you!
or if you can teach me more sentences about promotion/ marketing could be better, thank you!
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Early bird ticks for empower innovation submit

Our empower innovation submit takes place on September 09th 2016 in Shanghai.

Submit is a one-day event with inspirational keynote speakers, enriching panel discussions, and valuable networking opportunities for top-tier professionals relevant with innovation.

Please join us to get spirit and advanced information for your innovation circumstantial.

Early bird tickets for whole day even only need：1000RMB
Deadline： 31st July

Venue: 800 Show, 800 Changde Rd, JingAn, Shanghai, China
Event agenda:
9:30-10:30 ice break speech
10:30-11:30 innovation in enterprises
14:00-16:30 service design in China
18:30-20:30 successful design awards ceremony

Featured Speakers:
David
XXXX
XXX
To be continued

Tickets for event
Morning forum：800RMB
Afternoon forum：800RMB
Package：1200RMB
VIP（only 50）： 1500
VIPs can reserve front seats and can attend lunch invocation gathering/workshop

Members of successful design are entitled to an exclusive price: 850 RMB

Edited:

This is an advertisement for our upcoming conference, please kindly check it for me, thank you!
or if you can teach me more sentences about promotion/ marketing that would be better, thank you!
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Early bird tickets for empower innovation submit (?)

Our empower innovation submit takes place on September 9th, 2016 in Shanghai.

Submit is a one-day event with inspirational keynote speakers, enriching panel discussions, and valuable networking opportunities for top-tier professionals in the innovation industry. (?)
Please join us to get advanced information for your innovations!

Early bird tickets for whole day event only: 1000RMB
Deadline： July 31st, 2016

Venue: 800 Show, 800 Changde Road, JingAn, Shanghai, China
Event agenda:
9:30-10:30 ice breaker (welcome?)
10:30-11:30 innovation in enterprises
14:00-16:30 service design in China
18:30-20:30 successful design awards ceremony

Featured Speakers:
David
XXXX
XXX
To be continued

Tickets for event
Morning forum：800RMB
Afternoon forum：800RMB
Package：1200RMB
VIP（only 50）： 1500
VIPs can reserve front seats and can attend a lunch invocation gathering/workshop

Members of successful design are entitled to an exclusive price: 850 RMB

Tickets shortened is ‘tix’

** I wasn’t sure what you meant by submit, if you meant summit??

Is “successful design” a company?  If so, make sure it’s capitalized.

I wasn’t sure about this part:

networking opportunities for top-tier professionals in the innovation industry. (?)
Please join us to get advanced information for your innovations!

Sorry!!  Let’s keep working on this next class, and we can work on more marketing and advertising vocabulary!