Email Service 6th February

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Today must be a nice day ,when i’m weak up,the sunshine is very warmer,and then i get up.my husband is ready for breakfast (let me guess what does he do,i think instant noodles ).but i don’t like instant noodles,it’s not healthy and if you eat more it,you will lost your appetite.so i suggest everybody don’t eat more instant noodles as possible as you can.today i will back to my hometown,so i’m very happy.after breakfast should pick up luggage. during the coming soon Chinese new year, i have brought some gifts to my parents,i hope buy more present to my parents,but during the January,Chinese stock market fell so much,so i have lost a lot of money in investment.can i cry? no,stock market you can earn money and lose money,i should summing up experience,waiting next cow market.past is past,i should work hard.now ,i am on the train to my hometown,some people are reading books,someone eating,someone sleeping,but i am summing up the 2015,and make a plan for 2016.

Your Edited Email

Today must be a nice day. When I was waking up,the sunshine was very warm. Afterwards, i got up and my husband was ready for breakfast and I guessed he was making instant noodles but i don’t like them because they’re not healthy and if you eat more, you will lose your appetite. So i suggest everybody to eat as few instant noodles as possible. Today i will go back to my hometown, so i’m very happy. After breakfast I need to pick up my luggage. During the coming Chinese new year, ……

Doris, I will just correct the first part of this as there are too many mistakes. I’d like you to have a look at the next part of your email and for every sentence, ask yourself “what time am I talking about?”. Your grammar needs to match the time. Let’s review next class! Thanks

i have brought some gifts to my parents,i hope buy more present to my parents,but during the January,Chinese stock market fell so much,so i have lost a lot of money in investment.can i cry? no,stock market you can earn money and lose money,i should summing up experience,waiting next cow market.past is past,i should work hard.now ,i am on the train to my hometown,some people are reading books,someone eating,someone sleeping,but i am summing up the 2015,and make a plan for 2016.