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Ethiopian Airlines crash:causing 157 people onboard dead (lilyl)
A Boeing 737 aircraft crashed in Ethiopian after takeoff in six minutes, which caused 157 people onboard died on last Sunday. The victims in this accident came form at least 32 countries, including 22 united states staff who were delegated to join environment conference.
According to the passage, the concerning aircraft is kind of new aircraft released in recent years but it has been crashed twice in half year. In this case, some countries like Chinese aviation authority announced that it will grounded the Boeing 737 aircraft as a safety precaution, and some other countries is monitoring the latest investigation.

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Ethiopian Airlines crash:causing 157 fatalities among passengers (lilyl)
A Boeing 737 aircraft crashed in Ethiopia six minutes after takeoff, which caused 157 people on board to die last Sunday. The victims in this accident came from at least 32 countries, including 22 united states staff who were delegated to join an environmental conference.
According to the passage, the aircraft concerned is a kind of new aircraft released in recent years but it has crashed twice in only half a year. In this case, some countries like the Chinese aviation authority announced that it will ground the Boeing 737 aircraft as a safety precaution. As well as this, other countries are monitoring the situation / investigation.