Email Service Notes (Jesse)

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As a Shanghainese person, I rarely care about the historical background and the story of these architectures. One day, a friend of mine came to shanghai, and we paid a visit to the Bund, which is one of the famous tourist sights in Shanghai. I’m by no means a historical buff, so I checked some information about the Bund on the internet. The Bund is located on East ZhongShan 1st Road, where you can see many spectacular buildings. My friend was speechless when she first saw them. These buildings are majestic from afar, but only when you get close up can you appreciate the details and complexity of it. The decorations on the wall that you haven’t seen them carefully before are amazing . It takes your breath away if you roam around. The area of the Bund used to be divided into the British concession in 1844, which is now known as the Bund international architecture exhibition group. You can acquire the knowledge of the development of the history, politics, culture and economy about Shanghai after visiting the bund.

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As a Shanghainese person, I rarely care about the historical background and the story of these architectures. One day, a friend of mine came to shanghai, and we paid a visit to the Bund, which is one of the famous tourist sights in Shanghai. I’m by no means a historical buff, so I checked some information about the Bund on the internet / online. The Bund is located on East ZhongShan 1st Road, where you can see many spectacular buildings. My friend was speechless when she first saw them. These buildings are majestic from afar, but only when you get close up can you appreciate the details and complexity of it. The decorations on the wall that you haven’t seen them carefully up close before are amazing . It takes your breath away as you roam around. An area of the Bund used to be divided into the British concession in 1844, which is now known as the Bund international architecture exhibition group. You can acquire the knowledge of the development of the history, politics, culture and economy of Shanghai from visiting the bund.

– Very well written!