VIP Class Notes (Jesse) [W]

Make an introduction, body and conclusion for your next story and use which and who.

I have a friend who is fat = I have a friend. He is fat.
I have a computer which is black = I have a computer. It is black.

3 years ago there was an old man called Jesse and a dog which made din. He thought his weight was too high as he wanted to reduce his weight. He asked his dog how to reduce his weight. His dog just felt very jittery and vanished very quickly. Jesse felt very angry as he put his dog into an oven. His dog thawed in one second. Then, Jesse asked his native friend George the same question. George just smashed him into the air.

Introduction
In Australia, around 3 years ago, an old man named Jesse had a dog named Olaf who was very loud and made din.

Body
Jesse thought his weight was too high and he wanted to reduce his weight. He asked his dog how to reduce his weight which means Jesse thought his dog was very smart / Jesse trusted his dog a lot. His dog just felt very jittery and vanished very quickly. Jesse felt very angry as he put his dog into an oven. His dog thawed in one second. Then, Jesse asked his native friend George the same question. George just smashed him into the air.

Conclusion
Jesse learned that he shouldn’t put snow dogs in the oven and he shouldn’t ask silly questions or he will get smashed. In the end, Jesse flew to Mars and became an alien. George used an RPG to shoot at Jesse on Mars who finally died.

Introduction + Body + Conclusion

Introduction – 2 sentences
Who are the main characters? What time did the story happen? Where did the story happen? What are the circumstances?

Body – 5-6 sentences
What is the story? What happened? Describe the place. What decisions did the characters make?

Conclusion – 2 sentences
What did the characters learn? What is the future of the characters? What was the point of the story