VIP Class Notes (Jesse) [W]

Vocabulary

firm < > soft
eg. your muscles are firm

fattening – to make you fat
eg. butter is really fattening

junk food

nutritional value
eg. this food has no nutritional value

unprocessed food < > processed food
eg. processed food is generally bad for you

Nowadays, the average weight of citizens is increasing in a lot of countries and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing at the same time.
There are many reasons that cause these problems in my opinion. Firstly, the food that we eat is more and more unhealthy. For example, there are a large amount of fast food restaurants in the street which food could cause fat easily and without any good effect to our body so that we called them as rubbish food. Secondly, with the development of science and technology are getting more convenience than before, most of people are rely on that, such as taking taxi or subway instead of walking and riding bicycle; having a meal by ordering food delivery instead of walking to a restaurant directly. Above that, I strongly feel that people’s average weight is getting higher and they are losing health and fitness as well.
In order to solve these problems and I believe that these are some measures could be taken. Firstly, we can eat some pure vegetable like salad which without any process procedure, it’s a healthy way to keep the body healthy. Secondly, we could go to the gym to do some exercises to lose weight and maintain the body’s fitness.
There are both good and bad effect on us to live in a convenience society now, but how to keep our body in a healthy and fitness condition is the most important things to us!

Nowadays, the average weight of citizens is increasing in a lot of countries and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing at the same time.
There are many reasons that cause these problems in my opinion. Firstly, the food that we eat is more and more unhealthy. For example, there are a large amount of fast food restaurants in the street in which the food is fattening and without any nutritional value so we call it junk food. Secondly, with the development of science and technology, our daily lives are getting more convenient, most people rely on that, such as taking taxis or subway instead of walking and riding bicycles; having a meal by ordering delivery food instead of walking to a restaurant directly. As a result of the above, I strongly feel that people’s average weight is getting higher and they are losing health and fitness as well.
In order to solve these problems and I believe that these are some measures that / which could be taken. Firstly, we can eat some pure vegetables like salad which is unprocessed, it’s a great / excellent / smart / easy way to keep the body healthy. Secondly, we could go to the gym to do some exercises to lose weight and maintain the body’s fitness.
There are both good and bad effects on us to live in a convenient society now, but how to keep our body in a healthy and fit condition is the most important thing to us!

Changes to make: include your answer (2 points, cause + measures) in both your introduction and conclusion. Remove some of the points that don’t add to your answer. Include 1 example that you’ve experienced.

Introduction: Nowadays, there is a clear trend toward an increase in weight for most peoples of the developed world, and it is my firm belief that this is as a result of the modernization of technology used by society, but is an issue that can be addressed with the support and pro-activity of both governments and companies alike.

Middle: 2 points on cause, 2 points on measures. 1 example.

Summary: The effect of this increasing of weight and decreasing of physical activity on society is clearly a negative one, and one which must be addressed at the highest levels if we are to solve the problem once and for all. However, this will be a challenge due to the over-reliance on mobile technology and the lack of necessity to move around as much as in previous generations. I believe that this change must be made quickly and intelligently to ensure the progress of our society and people as a whole.