VIP Class Notes (Jesse) [W]
Writing exercise
When you are traveling in Thailand, you must be finding a service of ridding elephants. It is popular of services in Thailand because a number of people like to ride elephants. Because of this, the service increases the service peoples’ income. However, this service is not merciful for those elephants because baby elephants have to separate with their parents under human violence. They have to take a long time to be used to carry people on their back. Whatever, it is day or night, those baby elephants don’t have a rest before they get able to carry people. Although, those baby elephants seem to be strong, their back is the weakest parts in their body structure. If you like them, please don’t ride them anymore. After this, I believe this kind of services will be replaced by a new service.
When you travel / are traveling in Thailand, you will definitely notice a lot of elephant riding services. It is a popular service in Thailand because a number of people like to ride elephants. Because of this, it’s very lucrative. However, this service is not good for / fair on / friendly to / is cruel to those elephants because baby elephants have to separate from their parents and be under human captivity. They have to take a long time to get used to carrying people on their back. Whether / regardless of whether, it is day or night, those baby elephants have to stay awake to learn the skill before they get forced to carry people around. Although, those baby elephants seem to be strong, their back is the weakest part of their body structure. If you like them, please don’t ride them anymore. After this, I believe this kind of service will be replaced by a new service.
When you are traveling in / taking trip around / visiting / going around Thailand, you will definitely / certainly / surely notice a lot of / a number of / tons of / plenty of / a multitude of elephant riding services. It is a popular / widely loved / common / big service in Thailand because a number of / a huge number people like to ride / are into riding / are big fans of riding elephants. Because of / due to / as a result of this, it’s very lucrative / profitable / good business / it’s a good money maker. However / actually / the problem is / unfortunately though, this service is not good for / fair on / friendly to / is cruel to those elephants / the elephants in question because / as / due to the fact that baby / infant / young elephants have to / must / are forced to / are made to separate from / leave / live apart from their parents and be under human captivity. They have to take a long time / ages / quite a while / a significant amount of time / a considerable time to get used to / adapt to / learn to deal with carrying people on their back. Whether / regardless of whether / regardless of the fact that, it is day or night, those baby elephants have to stay / remain awake to learn the skill before they get forced to carry people around. Although, those baby elephants seem to be / may look / have the appearance of being strong, their back is the weakest part / area / aspect of their body structure. If you like them, please don’t ride / refrain from riding / avoid riding them anymore / any longer / in future. After this / In the future / Over the coming years, I believe / I feel that this kind of service will be replaced by a new service.
Vocabulary
scuba diving / scuba dive
eg. i want to learn how to scuba dive
snorkeling / snorkel
eg. he went snorkeling in Thailand
tourismÂ
stay with < > separate from
lucrative – sth that can earn a lot of money
eg. this business is very lucrative
animal crueltyÂ
eg. animal cruelty is common in parts of asia
cruel / harmfulÂ
to get used to doing / to get used to it
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