VIP Class Notes (Jesse) [S]

Write about your job, how long you’ve worked in this company and what other experience you have. Focus on keeping ideas together that are related using conjunctions.

Corrected writing – main focus should be longer sentences (using conjunctions to connect related ideas.

I have two kids. A son who is 6 years old and a daughter who is 3 years old. My son is thin and he didn’t like to drink milk when he was a young baby. Even now he also eats a little . On the opposite, my daughter is fat and she has a good appetite.

My son is a nice person and he has a good temper. I think maybe he is like my husband. My husband is a good Daddy and he has spent most of his time to play with them, talk to them, read books for them. My son is not interested in games or other things which his same age person likes to do. His big hobby is to help out around the house.

My daughter has a bad temper .I think maybe she is like me. Because I am not a good temper person. She will be angry suddently because of minor things. And sometimes she pretends to be sad and her brother will be worried about her. So I think my son loves his younger sister very much. He is really a good brother.

When my daughter was about 2 years old, she could run fast and express herself clearly. So from last year, they can play with each other better and better. My husband and I can get a short break sometimes.

Every weekend, on Saturday, it’s our family time. They have no need to go to any education center. We go to some amusement parks or play with their friends. On Sunday ,sometimes they will go to an education centre to learn things. For example, lego class.

I have two kids, including a son who is 6 years old and a daughter who is 3 (years old). My son is thin and he didn’t like to drink milk when he was a young baby. Even now he still only eats a little . On the other hand / Opposite to him, my daughter is fat / a little big / chubby / a bit heavy and she has a good appetite.

My son is a nice person and he has a good temper, so, I think maybe he is like my husband. My husband is a good Daddy / dad / father and he spends most of his time to play with them, talk to them, read books to them. My son is not interested in computer or mobile games or other things which kids who are the same age as him like to do / which kids at the same age like to do. His big hobby is to help out around the house.

My daughter has a bad temper so I think maybe she is like me because I don’t have a good temper / I have a temper. She will be angry suddenly because of minor things / Even minor things often make her angry. And sometimes she pretends to be sad (for attention) and her brother will be worried about her. So I think my son loves his younger sister very much and he is really a good brother.

Since my daughter was about 2 years old / after my daughter turned 2, she could run fast and express herself clearly. So from last year, they have been able to play with each other better and better and my husband and I can get a short break sometimes.

Every weekend, on Saturday, it’s our family time and we go to some amusement parks or play with their friends so they have no need to go to any education center. However / But on Sunday ,sometimes they will go to an education centre to learn things, for example, lego class.

Grammar

from a child – from when I was a child / from my childhood

I want to eat a little = positive
I only want to eat a little / I don’t want to eat much = negative

read to sb = tell sb a story
read with sb = you both read
read for sb = help sb to read