VIP Class Notes (Jesse) [W]

Vocabulary

as for me – change for someone else to me

for me – just talk about yourself

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The chart gives an illustration of the variation of obesity of residents in diverse age groups in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.
Referring to inhabitants in 2015, it can be clearly seen that Charlestown witnessed a substantial growth in obese population with age creeping up. Specifically, obesity was deemed as a critical problem from the age of 50 upwards, a majority of whom is classified as obese, particularly for those who aging over 60s with nearly 60 percent. In marked contrast to it, locals of ideal weight experienced a plunge to merely 5 percent among 60-69-year-olds, starting from the incredibly high 70 percent. Besides, there are sharp fluctuations in rest age groups, namely underweight and overweight residents, which are generally two minimal proportions of all.
Conversely, an opposite pattern can be found in 1955, where people who have overweight or obesity problems make up a relatively low ratio, even being zero under 40-year-olds, while inhabitants who weight ideally take the place of obese population, being the most popular figure and staying quiet constant which stood over 40 percent throughout 50-yea-olds (20-69) . When it comes to people who underweight, the number decline marginally to 15 percent in 40-49 age group before it surged up, eventually peaking at 41 percent over 60-year-olds.
While comparing statistics in two years, it is evident that obesity or overweight has posed a severe threat to modern people, which means that the health of people going from bad to worse.

The chart gives an illustration of the variation of obesity of residents in diverse age groups in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.
Referring to inhabitants in 2015, it can be clearly seen that Charlestown witnessed a substantial growth in obese population with the increasing of age. Specifically, obesity was deemed as a critical problem from the age of 50 and upwards, a majority of whom are classified as obese, particularly for those who are aged over 60, with nearly 60 percent. In marked contrast to it, locals of ideal weight experienced a plunge to merely 5 percent among 60-69-year-olds, starting from the incredibly high, just over 2 thirds figure. Besides this, there are sharp fluctuations in the rest of the age groups, namely underweight and overweight residents, which are generally the two most minimal proportions of all.
Conversely, an opposite pattern can be found in 1955, where people who have / had overweight or obesity problems make up a relatively small number, even being zero for under 40-year-olds, while inhabitants who are at an ideal weight take the place of the obese population, being the most prevalent figure and staying quite constant at over 40 percent throughout the 50 year period (20-69). When it comes to people who are underweight, the number declined marginally to 15 percent in the 40-49 age group before it surged, eventually peaking at 41 percent for over 60-year-olds.
While comparing statistics in two years, it is evident that obesity or being overweight has posed a severe threat to modern people, which means that the health of people is going from bad to worse.