OpenF2F Class Notes 18th July (Celeste)***

Please review the edited story.

I had a free day.- I had an easy day at work because there was nothing to do.

Original

Lily is a smart, beautiful girl, and she was from a poor family. When she was born, the doctor diagnosed that she had a very heavy congenital heart disease. Her parents didn’t have enough money to support the treatment, so she was been deserted by her parents. The orphanage adopted her and organized people to donate to treat the disease for her. As time went by, Lily grew up. She became a kind, lively girl from an ugly duckling, and she is the same as other normal girl. If you didn’t know she was an orphan, you would never think of.

Edited

Lily is a smart, beautiful girl, and she was from a poor Chinese family. When she was born, the doctor diagnosed that she had a very heavy congenital heart disease. Her parents didn’t have enough money to pay for the treatment, so she was deserted by her parents. The orphanage adopted her and organized charities and fundraisers where people donated money to treat the disease. After the treatments, Lily became a healthy girl. She went from an ugly duckling to a beautiful swan.

TBC

She is a kind, lively girl and she is more excellent than other girls. If you didn’t know she was an orphan, you would never think of that.

How unfortunate. – How sad / unlucky.

I fiction. I make up. – I made her up.

Do you like movies that make you feel things?

Do you like dramas?

necessary adj. – to be essential

She gave birth her baby. – She gave birth to her baby.

movie recommendation / movie to watch: My Sister’s Keeper