Online Class Notes (Jesse) [30] [62]

no more “and” all the time
use: with sth doing / with sb doing, +ing verb
no “then”s 

check your tenses 
third person verbs 

MB carves a not so frightening JOL and puts it on the window. After that he sits at the door with a chair that he is sitting on, a table with a tray containing the TA and a bottle of ketchup. Then after a load of time (10 seconds in the video) the doorbell rang, and a excited MB opens the door to find 2 children and say “you’re so scary” and rush into his home but instead of giving them TA he uses the ketchup to fake blood on his mouth and scared the children, causing them to cry so MB rushed into the house again and give them TA.

MB carves a not so frightening JOL and puts it on the window. After that he sits at the door with a chair that he is sitting on, a table with a tray containing the TAs and a bottle of ketchup. Then after a load of time (10 seconds in the video) the doorbell rings, and an excited MB opens the door to find 2 children and says / with him saying “you’re so scary” to them and rushing into his home but instead of giving them TA he uses the ketchup to fake blood on his mouth and (he) scares the children, causing them to cry so he rushes into the house again, giving them TA.

Vocabulary

devil horns / outfit 

rake + boxing glove 

Grammar

no more “and” all the time
use: with sth doing / with sb doing, +ing verb

he do / does
she does
it does
we do
they do
I do
MB does
you do

The children (they) reach out to take them but the TA’s are stuck onto the tray so the children tug and tug and fall down on the ground. Because of the earlier MB scaring them event they are so mad that they leave the house without any treats / leave the house empty handed. Then, MB sadly holds the tray and goes back inside. But then he doesn’t notice a boy that is wearing a devil costume is watching him (that’s the boy from RMB and ball bean), planning something evil or bad or both.