F2F Class Notes (Phoebe)

Write about one of your favourite books and reasons why you like it.

Original:

I think my dad is a patriarchal man which there are some reasons can explain he is.
In my mind, my dad rarely cooks for us, my mum needs to do a lot of things.
Everyday, she gets up at around 6:00 AM. First , she tidies all the rooms, do the laundry,sweeps the floor and cooks for us.
She always washes up after meals, my dad never does it. If my dad is thirsty, he asks my mum to get water for him.
He is an adult, he is able to do everything, my mum doesn’t need take of him.
My dad charges the money, My mum has only some pocket money. If she wants to buy some things, my dad says “NO”, she can’t do it.

With corrections:

I think my dad is a patriarchal man. which there There are some reasons which can explain why he is.
In my mind memory, my dad rarely cooks cooked for us, my mum needs needed to do a lot of things.
Everyday, she gets got up at around 6:00 AM. Firstly/At first, she tidies tidied all the rooms, do did the laundry,sweeps swept the floor and cooks cooked for us. Secondly,…
She always washes washed up after meals, my dad never does did it. If my dad is was thirsty, he asks would ask my mum to get water for him.
He is an adult, he is able to do everything on his own, my mum doesn’t need take care of him.
My dad charges earns/makes the money, My my mum has only some pocket money. If When she wants to buy some things, if my dad says “NO”, she can’t do it.