F2F Class Notes (Nicholas)[S]

Vocabulary

extreme – 极端

e.g. I think extreme people are interesting.

complex 复杂

e.g. Sometimes life is too complex.

life is too quick – life is too fast paced

passionate – 热情

e.g. What are you passionate about?

e.g. What is your passion?

e.g. What are some things you’re passionate about?

influential – 影响

e.g. For Gao Yan, her father was a very influential person in her life.

contradiction – 矛盾

e.g. There are some interesting contradictions in her story.

person to person – personally

once a week – once weekly

twice a week – two times a week – twice weekly

once a year – annually

twice a year – semiannually

once every two years – biannually

Grammar

a difficult part

the most difficult part

Remove the word THE

e.g. the government

e.g. the most important part

Original

I think money is not very important because I think money is enough is OK, but after my married I think the money is very important – I need buy house, and pay for my kid – I like girls but the doctor told me you have a boy – “oh it’s OK” – I think girl is very lovely but boy…just eat something than play cars on the ground, watch TV cartoon but not like a girl’s emotion – I think every stage in my life – right now I think money is very important so I think the life need money because the money make the life very easier and comfortable – recently I have a decision by my job maybe I think maybe I need to quit this job because I don it think very happy in this job – after my graduate from the college – I think very tired and not do the things I like to do –  just the thing is – you know Chinese people have difficult things among people and people. I think it’s the people circle – I think its very difficult. You have the level and you must know a lot of things – it’s not easy. Because I think SH is very developed and quick so I don’t take of care my family, I don’t care my parents or kids, maybe I need to take care about their healthy and life, and I need have trouble in this year. Maybe travel around in China and draw something because I like drawing – but I have no time.

Corrected

I think money is not very important because I think just having enough money is OK, but after my marriage / after I got married I thought / started to think that money is very important – for example I need to buy a house, and pay for my kid – I like girls but the doctor told me you have a boy – so I said “oh it’s OK” – I think girls are very lovely but boys are very naughty…they just eat something then play cars on the ground, watch TV cartoons but emotionally they are very different than girls – I think every stage in my life is different – right now I think money is very important so I think the life needs / [requires] money because the money make the life much easier and comfortable – recently I made a decision about my job maybe / perhaps I think maybe I need to quit this job because I dont think I am very happy in this job – after I graduated from the college – I think I am very tired and I don’t do the things I like to do –  just the thing is – you know dealing with Chinese people personally is difficult. I think it’s the social circle – I think its very difficult. You have the level and you must know a lot of things – it’s not easy. Because I think SH is very developed and fast paced so I don’t take of care my family, I don’t care for my parents or kids, maybe I need to take care of their health and life, and I need to travel in this year. Maybe I will travel around in China or draw something because I like drawing – but I have no time.

Speak in PAST TENSE, especially when telling stories

Original

My father because – I think I’m a girl for a father every father will take care the daughter or have some warm to daughter – but I think he’s very serious to me – strict – but after I be an adult I think the way he teach me or strict to me is very important things in my life I think.  The study and be a person – I think it’s very hard. Maybe in my primary school I need to wash his car and be a pocket money to me – a week once time – maybe I think I should pay my labor to earn the money in the social life – maybe drawing from my 7 years old – I don’t know exactly what he do

Corrected

My father because – I think I’m a girl – for a father every father will take care of his daughter or have some warm feelings toward his daughter – but I think he’s very serious toward me – strict – but after I became an adult I think that the way he taught me was very important for my life / was very important for my development.  He was especially strict when it came to my studies and how to be a person. I think it was very hard. Maybe in my primary school I needed to wash his car and then he gave some pocket money to me – once weekly – maybe I think I should pay my labor to earn the money in the social life – maybe drawing since I was 7 years old – I don’t know exactly what he does.