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Write about Shanghai Subway with new vocabularies:

I always try to avoid taking subway during rush hours in Shanghai as it is always over occupied. If you stand at any main entry of subways at 8am or 6pm, you can see crowd rush into subway stations. After entering, you have to wait in queues and if you can get on the coming 2nd subway, you are already quite lucky. Then you may need to shove all the riders around you to ensure both of your feet have a place on the floor. Usually aisles were fully occupied, so even you can’t catch any handrail you may not have space to full down when subway stops. But you may trample each other in case there is any sudden stop. To avoid further riot in that situation, it’s better to reminder yourself keep calm on the subway and try your best to hold yourself as stable as a statue on pedestal. You may have experienced some real nightmare on your way to office before, such as your angry boss is waiting in office to check your clock in but your subway just breakdown for 15 minutes which means you can’t get any proven from Subway Company for the delay, please don’t think about to punch your subway or the conductor standing on platform. You can take out your mobile and tweet your upset picture on Wechat to your boss and hope him or her can give you some special treat.

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Write about Shanghai Subway with new vocabulary🙁already plural)

I always try to avoid taking the subway during rush hour in Shanghai as it’s always too crowded. If you stand at any main subway entrance around 8am or 6pm, you can see crowds rush into the subway stations. After entering, you have to wait in line and if you can get on the 2nd train that comes you are already pretty lucky. Then you may need to shove all the passengers around you to ensure both of your feet have are firmly on the floor. Usually aisles are fully occupied, so you can’t even hold on to any handrail. You may not have any space to fall down when the subway stops. But you may trample each other if there is any sudden stop. To avoid a full-blown riot in that situation, it’s better to reminder yourself to keep calm on the (GREAT! you didn’t forget THE!) subway and be like a statue on a pedestal. You may have experienced some real nightmares on your way to the office before, such as your angry boss is waiting there to check your clock in but your subway just broke-down for 15 minutes which means you can’t get any proof from the Subway Company for the delay. It might be tempting but, please don’t think about punching the conductor standing on platform. You can take out your phone and share your angry picture on Wechat to your boss and hope he or she can give you some special treat.

Americans make a lot of Grammar mistakes, but we never forget THE. A or AN

I have pet dog. I found him near train. I will take him to veterinarian. (This sentence is obviously not written by an American.)

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