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Demo StudentCarol J

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Christmas and New Year are coming soon. I am planning to have a short trip at the middle of Dec after my PMP exam since I still have several days’ annual leave and it must be taken within this year due to our company policy, otherwise it will be wasted. I am considering where I will go.
The first option is Yellow mountain which locates in Anhui province and is one of most famous mountain in China. Actually, I have been there before. The first time was when I studied in university and I went there with my classmates at spring and the second time was when I worked at my first company and I went there with my colleagues at Autumn. The scenery was so amazing that I want to go there again at different season. During the winter time, we can see soft rime that water or mist are frozen on the trees’ branches.
The second option is Chongqing which I have never been there before. I can also meet my best friend and she moved there two years ago. I also like hotpot and it is very delicious with different flavors.

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Christmas and New Year‘s Eve are coming soon. I am planning to take a short trip in the middle of Dec after my PMP exam, since I still have several days’ of annual leave and they must be taken within this year according to company policy, otherwise it will be wasted. I am considering where I will go.
The first option is Yellow mountain in Anhui province and is one of most famous mountains in China. Actually, I have been there before. The first time was when I studied in university and I went there with my classmates in the spring and the second time was when I worked at my first company and I went there with my colleagues in Autumn. The scenery was so amazing that I want to go there again in a different season. During the winter, we can see icicles from water or mist are frozen on the trees’ branches.
The second option is Chongqing. I have never been there before. I can also meet my best friend and she moved there two years ago. I also like hotpot and it is very delicious with different flavors.