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My dream is to pursue a career in biomedical sciences, focusing specifically on molecular biology. Conducting the experiments independently helped me discover I really have a knack for experimental research. Designing research project induced me to realize the rigor of scientific thinking genuinely enjoyable. The challenge of dealing with unanticipated phenomena to understand the molecular basis of pathological conditions appeals greatly to me. I hope to devote my life’s work to biomedical innovations, becoming a leading scholar in the field of pharmacology and further making tangible contributions to treat and cure diseases.

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My dream is to pursue a career in biomedical sciences, focusing specifically on molecular biology. Conducting the experiments independently helped me discover I really have a knack for experimental research. Designing research projects helped me to realize that the rigor of scientific thinking is genuinely enjoyable. The challenge of dealing with unanticipated phenomena to understand the molecular basis of pathological conditions really appeals to me. I hope to devote my life’s work to biomedical innovations, becoming a leading scholar in the field of pharmacology and further making tangible contributions to treat and cure diseases.

Wow! Impressive writing. I don’t think I could have done much better myself. Good Job!