Email Service Notes (Tony)

Your Original Email

My job is a bank clerk and I have done this job for four years.At first,my responsibility was to withdrow and depoist money for clients.I would face to people all days ,which made me a little anxious and not comfortable.But now I feel more relaxed to communicate with all kinds of people and be patient and polite and can help them a lot,which makes me feel proud. Recently,I have learned to be a financial advicer and also leanred open accounts for companies.It is more challenging and advanced than before.My goal is to make portfolio management and make international nvestment for clients.I hope I can realize it one day.

Your Edited Email

I’ve been a bank clerk for four years. At first, my responsibility was to withdraw and deposit money for clients. I would deal with people people everyday, which made me a little anxious and uncomfortable. But now I feel more relaxed to communicate with all kinds of people and be patient and polite and help them a lot, which makes me feel proud. Recently, I have learned to be a financial advisor and also learned to open accounts for companies. It is more challenging and advanced than before. My goal is to do portfolio management and make international investment for clients. I hope I can realize it one day.