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Your Original Email:

Dear Professor James Cook,

Very warmly welcome for your coming!
I am a student union president of our art academy, named Liming. I will recommend you some tourists in Shanghai, including in The bund、the Yu garden and Songjiang film and television park. The highlight points are as following:

First of all, the bund, where is diversified tourists, you can see many different country’s style buildings facing the HuangPu river and there are a big platform that you can go sightseeing around that. Next one is the Yu garden, where collected many Chinese traditional handicrafts stores. The last one is Songjiang film and television park, where is a place produced lots of TV series.

Hope you will enjoy the time in chain. Moreover, we are looking forward you classes.
Liming.

Your Corrected Email:

Dear Professor James Cook,

We’d like to warmly welcome you.
I am the student union president of our art academy, named Liming. I will recommend some sights for you to see in Shanghai, including The bund、the Yu garden and Songjiang film and television park. The highlight points are as following:

First of all, the bund, there are all kinds of tourists, you can see many different styles of architecture facing the HuangPu river and there is a observation deck that you can go sightseeing around. Next one is the Yu garden, which has a collection of many Chinese traditional handicraft stores. The last one is Songjiang film and television park, where they produce lots of TV series.

Hope you will enjoy your time in China. Moreover, we are looking forward your classes.
Liming.