Email Service Notes (Tony)

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There has been a hot topic online recently that a mother and her three kids were killed by fire in their high class apartment, meanwhile their nanny escaped from the elevator which could be used only by herself. As soon as the news released, the society came to a consensus that they deserved to die because they looked the nanny down and didn’t allow her to use the same elevator as they did. But after a couple hours, this news turned into another story. The police found out that the apartment was burned down by someone else, and the most sarcastic thing is the perpetrator happened to be the nanny, the only survivor of the accident whom was felt pity by the society in the first place. It turned out that the family paid her more than 10K as her per month salary, they even borrowed her 100K to help her settle some debt problems once. But she was too greedy, so she stole some jewelry, and to cover her trace she set the apartment on fire eventually. It is kind of fortunate that the husband was on a business trip so he escaped from this accident. But on the other hand, this is also a tragedy for him. He’s in his thirties and supposed to have a bright future ahead of him. Now the only thing he has is the tremendous grief. He won’t live the rest of his life without this miserable memory.

Your Corrected Email:

There has been a hot topic online recently that a mother and her three kids died in a fire in their high class apartment, meanwhile their nanny escaped from the elevator which was the only one she had access to. As soon as the news came out, society came to a consensus that they deserved to die because they looked down on the nanny and didn’t allow her to use the same elevator as they did. But after a couple hours, this turned into another story. The police found out that the apartment was burned down by an arsonist, and the most ironic thing is the perpetrator happened to be the nanny, the sole survivor of the accident, who everyone originally felt bad for. (originally/ in the first place). It turned out that the family paid her more than 10K per month, they even loaned her 100K to help her settle some debts. But she was too greedy, so she stole some jewelry, and to cover her tracks she set the apartment on fire. It is kind of fortunate that the husband was on a business trip so he wasn’t trapped in the fire too. But on the other hand, this is also a tragedy for him. He’s in his thirties and supposed to have a bright future ahead of him. Now the only thing he has is tremendous grief. He will live the rest of his life with this miserable memory.