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An lovely day in Disney park.(LilyL)
I went to Shanghai Disney park with my friend today, for a free ticket which prepared for the people who will have a birthday in June. My friend and me are both born in June and luck enough to book this kinds of free tickets in Disney’s official website. Then, we decide to enjoy a lovely day. When we arrived at Disney park, what came out of our expectation is that the weather turned to rainy. Suddenly it rained cat and dog ,so we have to get out of rain in a restaurant.
An hour later, the sky cleared up. We started to visit the fantasy Shanghai Disney park ,which built up in 2016 years and it is the second Disney theme park in China. The whole park desperate into six part scenic spots, including mickey street, fantasy park, adventure island, future world, treasure bay and land of dreams(remark: all of this above phrase is my personal translation ). All of this scenic spots are fantastic and full of imagination, like Disney cartoon figures, it ornamented every little children’s fairy tale dreams. Even though I am 24 years old , I still moved deeply when saw this amazing designed performance. Anyway ,it was how a lovely day!

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A lovely day in Disney Land.(LilyL)

I went to Shanghai Disney land with my friend today, I got a free ticket, because they are giving them to people who will have a birthday in June. My friend and I are both born in June and lucky enough to get some free tickets on Disney’s official website. Then, we decided to have a lovely day. When we arrived at Disney Land, it started to rain. Suddenly it rained cats and dogs ,so we had to get out of the rain in a restaurant.
An hour later, the sky cleared up. We started to wander around Shanghai Disney Land ,which was built in 2016, and is the second Disney theme park in China. The whole park is split into six scenic parts, including mickey street, fantasy park, adventure island, future world, treasure bay and land of dreams(remark: all of these above phrases are my personal translation ). All of these scenic spots are fantastic and full of imagination, like Disney cartoon figures, it is decorated like every little children’s fairy tale dreams. Even though I am 24 years old , I am still moved deeply when I saw those amazing designs. Anyway, it was a lovely day!