Email Service Notes (Jesse)

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On Monday.My friend told me that she found a new restaurant,so she want to eat with me.I promised her to eat the new restaurant.
The next day,I got to the restaurant before the set time.I was quite thirsty.Then I called a waiter,said:”give me a glass of strawberry juice please”He said;”ok,wait a moment.” After a time,My friend came here.Long time no see,we were excited.Than.the waiter came over and said:”Would you like something to drink?”she said:”a bottle of lemonade,thank you.”.One hours later We took the subway to come to people’square because we want to shopping in Nike.Nike is a big shoes brand.I saw a pair of cool shoes when I at Nike,I said to the staff:”Can I try 38 size?” Then.The staff brought it for me.He said:”Do thoseshoes fit?”I said:”yes,It’s cool”.Finally I bought this shoes.At 6PM we met ours Spanish friends.ate hot pot for dinner.

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On Monday.My friend told me that she found a new restaurant,so she wanted to eat there with me. I promised her that we would eat at the new restaurant soon.
The next day,I got to the restaurant before the set time. As I was quite thirsty I called a waiter and said:”give me a glass of strawberry juice please”He said;”ok,wait a moment.” After some time, My friend arrived! It had been a long time since we last saw each other, so we were excited. Then, the waiter came over and said:”Would you like something to drink?” she said: “a bottle of lemonade,thank you.”. One hour later we took the subway to people’s square because we wanted to go shopping at Nike. Nike is a big shoe brand. I saw a pair of cool shoes when I was in the Nike store so I said to the staff: “Can I try this in a 38?” Then, the staff brought it for me. He said:”Do those shoes fit?”I said:”yes, they’re cool”.Finally I bought them. At 6PM we met our Spanish friends and had hot pot for dinner.