Email Service Notes (Jesse)

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Yesterday was a terrible day for our family.

In yesterday morning.I drived my car to took my daughter to school.
When I drived out of the housing estate,the auto true was suddenly broken.
We must took the car for a repair,then,took bus to go to school,so,We were late.

In the evening,I didn’t do any otherthings with my phone,suddenly,the phone was break down.
Everyday,my daughter ‘a teacher took their homework(what they need to do)to their parents.But now,I can’t see that.

What a terrible day for us!

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Yesterday was a terrible day for our family.

Yesterday morning [ In the morning ] I drove my daughter to school [ I drove my car to take my daughter to school ].
When I drove out of the housing estate [ apartment complex ], the I suddenly got a flat tire so we needed to take the car to get repaired [ to the mechanic ]. Then, we took the bus to go to school, so, we were late.

In the evening, I didn’t do any other things [ anything else / anything ] with my phone, but suddenly it broke [ it died / it had a problem / there was something wrong with my phone ].
Everyday, my daughter’s teacher sends their homework (what they need to do) to the parents, but now, I can’t see it.

What a terrible day for us!