Email Service Notes (Jesse)

Your Original Email

Dear Nemo

Good Morning.
Today is second day in new company. My supervisor shared the company’s mission and organization map, and also shared what is our company offered? why we do that? Who our target client is? What plan (short term and long term) is for our team? The idea is very nice and inspired. I got much information for different model between traditional industry and Internet industry.

I firstly improve my feeling for life taste, propose to see luxury brand such as LV, Catier, Hermes, to know about their quality, show way. This is very interesting studying process since every girls like going window-shopping.

I have lots of expectation for my new job, come on

Thanks
Candy

Your Edited Email

Dear Nemo

Good Morning.
Today is the second day at my new company / in my new job. My supervisor shared the company’s mission and organization map, and also shared what our company offers, why we do it, who our target client is, and what the plans (both short and long term) are for our team. The idea is very good and inspiring to me. I got a lot of information for different models of traditional industries and the online industry.

I firstly improved my feeling for life taste, propose <— I don’t understand to see luxury brand such as LV, Cartier, Hermes, to know about their quality, and the way they are presented / marketed. This is a very interesting studying process since every girl likes going window-shopping.

I am really looking forward to my new job! Come on!! / Bring it on! 

Thanks
Candy