Email Service Notes (Jesse)

Your Original Email

– How’s the movie, The Invisible Guest?
– It’s awesome.
– I read the book before, but I’ve already forgotten how did the guy end up with.
– Of course, he ended up with getting busted. He had it coming.
– Yes. He’s so mean to his mistress.
– He’s mean? He’s brutal! I can’t help but think of his face, the handsome and disgusting face.
– Oh, you’re really into the movie.
– Yes, it’s brilliant. You gotta vet every sentence of their conversation, otherwise you couldn’t get it right away.

Your Edited Email

– How’s the movie, The Invisible Guest?
– It’s awesome.
– I read the book before, but I’ve already forgotten how the guy ended up.
– Of course, he ended up getting busted. He had it coming.
– Yes. He’s so mean to his mistress.
– He’s mean? He’s brutal! I can’t help but think of his face… that handsome and disgusting face.
– Oh, you’re really into this movie aren’t you?
– Yes, it’s brilliant. You gotta vet every sentence of their conversation, otherwise you can’t get it right away.