Email Service Notes (Jesse)

Your Original Email

1)
I always think I came to the US was the best decision,also thanks Jesse told me some advice. I like here,because western people do something regarding these rules, I mean they have principles that step by step and it is true and authentic.Due to the different culture,I couldn’t give them correct feedback when western people talked with me. Does this test wisdom? I am not sure.I want to find the answers but I don’t know where can I catch up the answers.
This is experience to me in the UK,so I think it’s good.I would like to talk with foreigners, with I am afraid of my speaking, so I have not did it.
2)
I went to the shopping mall yesterday and I bought a lipstick! The color was very nice and the price was expensive but I was happy!
I have got a new part time job in a Chinese restaurant! It was interesting as well as terrible. I have met a lot of people from different countries and have served on them. The significant things that I heard the boss pays the salary is not on time. I was not good when I had heard that news! I worked more than 30 hours a week and then they haven’t paid me! I decided that I will talk with the boss on Friday!

Your Edited Email

1)
I always think coming to the US (haha you mean UK?) was the best decision. Also thanks to Jesse who gave me some advice. I like it here,because western people try to follow the rules… I mean they have principles that step by step (you mean their principles are logical..?) and they are true and authentic. Due to the different culture,I couldn’t give them correct feedback / I can’t reply properly when western people talked with me. Does this test my wisdom / Is this a reflection of my wisdom? I am not sure. I want to find the answers but I don’t know where can I get the answers.
This is experience for me in the UK, so I think it’s good. I would like to talk with foreigners, but I am afraid of my speaking, so I have not done it.
2)
I went to the shopping mall yesterday and I bought a lipstick! The color was very nice and the price was expensive but I was happy!
I have got a new part time job in a Chinese restaurant! It was interesting as well as terrible. I have met a lot of people from different countries and have served on them. The significant thing that I heard was that the boss pays the salaries late. I was not happy when I had heard that news! I worked more than 30 hours a week and then they haven’t paid me! I decided that I will talk with the boss on Friday!