Email Service Notes (Jesse)

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Your Original Email

Sandra: Hiiii, my writing today is about something pops out when you follows a twtter acc.

I would like to have it revised in 2 versions: formal and informal. Btw my vocabulary sucks, please do help me with it. ;/ And if it is possible, please point it out if there are logistical problems.

If you find it overworked then make it 2~3 days’ work. xDD

Thank you!

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Heyyyy, thank you for following MoonDog!!

Here we provide you the most interesting and cool info of gaming life.

You can find our app “MoonDog” via google store or ios store.

In MoonDog, you can find duos, make friends, share the same interest with friendly people.

It’s time to ditch those bad-behaviored players!

This is what gaming supposed to be, cool and fun.

Your Edited Email

Sandra: Hiiii, my writing today is about something that pops up when you follow a twtter acc.

I would like to have it revised in 2 versions: formal and informal. Btw my vocabulary sucks, please do help me with it. ;/ And if it is possible, please point it out if there are logistical problems.

If you find it’s too much work then make it 2~3 days’ work. xDD

Thank you!

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Heyyyy, thank you for following MoonDog!!
Hi there, thank you so much for following the official MoonDog account. It’s our pleasure to have you. 

Here we provide you with the most interesting and cool gaming info.
At MoonDog, we strive to provide you with the most interesting and relevant gaming news and information, ensuring you’re kept up-to-date at all times. 

You can find our app “MoonDog” via google store or ios store.
Our app can be found on the Google Store or iOS App Store under “MoonDog”.

With MoonDog, you can find teammates, make friends, and share interests with friendly people.
Making friends with like-minded gamers, exchanging ideas, and teaming up to enjoy your favourite games, are just a few benefits to being a MoonDog user.

It’s time to ditch those salty players!
No longer do you need to put up with bad-behavior from the players around you. 

This is what gaming supposed to be, cool and fun.
Welcome to the amazing and authentic world of gaming that we call MoonDog.