Email Service Notes (Jesse)

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The Mid-autumn festival had passed , we had restart to do our daily routine again, but fortunately, we just need to work for 9 days, then we can approach the holidays of national day.
In the past holiday, it is a little bit tired for me. before the holiday I need to visit all my important customers.
At the first day of the holiday I woke up at 8:30 A.M, It is earlier for me during the holiday, I needed to study the Buddhism lesson online. The second day, I invited my friend who is also my customer, we had a good relationship, and we’re often have fun together.
The last day I visited some elders which are my mother’s old brother and sister. They both helped me, I really appreciated to them.

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The Mid-autumn festival has passed , so we have restarted to do our daily routines again, but fortunately, we just need to work for 9 days, and then we can start the national day holidays.
This recent holiday was a little bit tiring for me because before the holiday I needed to visit all my important customers.
On the first day of the holiday I woke up at 8:30 A.M, which is early for me during holidays, because I needed to take a Buddhism lesson online. On the second day, I invited my friend who is also my customer, to have a meal / to go out?. we have a good relationship, and we often have fun together when we hang out.
On the last day I visited some elderly people who are my mother’s old brother and sister. They both helped me (you mean in your life they have helped you a lot? or they helped you during this holiday?), I really appreciated to them.